tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8005062827798430682.post8232232890804430329..comments2024-02-21T05:25:03.233-05:00Comments on Adventures in YA Publishing: Query Letter #33Martina Boonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03358736828122139189noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8005062827798430682.post-74690893525746419812010-09-30T19:51:14.693-04:002010-09-30T19:51:14.693-04:00Wow, this has improved big time. The only concern ...Wow, this has improved big time. The only concern is that it's about vampires, which as Carol pointed out, a lot of agents (and editors) are sick of. But your concept is unique enough to work. And there's no sparkling vampires and romance, which is a big perk. Plus, it's from a guys point of view. Smart move. :D<br /><br />Good luck with it!Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8005062827798430682.post-58473569196287926052010-09-30T12:24:44.663-04:002010-09-30T12:24:44.663-04:00This is improved from your original query! Good jo...This is improved from your original query! Good job. The length is good (not too long for busy agents) and the key points of the plot are described. As a minor tweaky point, government-sanctioned would be hyphenated. <br /><br />This sounds VERY dystopian, and will appeal to agents who like dystopian (as long as they're not sick of vampires; do your research carefully, as some agents are moving away from vampires). <br /><br />If your psychiatric experience doesn't factor into your book, don't include it. Definitely include the semi-finalist bit; that's cool and pertinent. Good luck with this!Carol Riggshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14092209912983783974noreply@blogger.com