Thursday, February 11, 2016

18 Red Light/Green Light Contest: Announcing the Top 50 Submissions!

Happy Thursday, everyone!

Below are the top 50 entries in our Red Light/Green Light contest, where writers are vying for the prize of a phone call with fabulous agent Patricia Nelson at Marsal Lyon Literary.


Be sure to check back next Thursday, when we'll post our agent judge's top 25 selected entries!

CONGRATS to all who made it in, and good luck going forward!

And now, presenting:

THE TOP 50 ENTRIES
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Terry Bell
Young Adult Fantasy
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Pa was taking too long to cut the boys’ throats.

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Amber Duell
Young Adult Fantasy
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War is beautiful chaos.

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D Lollis
Middle Grade Contemporary
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"Mom, Brandon is smelling his dirty underwear—again," my older sister Bethany yelled as I crawled on the cold marble tile of the third floor laundry room.

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KD Proctor
New Adult Romance
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If it’s possible for a tray of pastries to blackmail me, I think I might need to file a restraining order against The Steamy Bean’s cinnamon chip scones.

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Kara Reynolds
Young Adult SciFi
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The universe should have a rule that bad news can't arrive over breakfast, but it doesn't.

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Mary Hallberg
Young Adult Paranormal
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As Penny walked inside the funeral home doors, the cold air stung her skin.

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Traci Kenworth
Young Adult Fantasy
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Of all the things Karrie Hunter's mother missed about Earth, color remained the biggest.

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Ellie Luken
Young Adult Fantasy
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Only fools or the desperate wandered beyond the city walls by themselves.

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Jennifer Schafer
Young Adult Contemporary
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Dad says the empty spaces in our lives, like moments of silence in music, amplify or accentuate the importance of the people we hold closest.

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Devyn B. Makin
Young Adult Magical Realism
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Routine is what predators look for in their prey.

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Laura McFadden
Young Adult Contemporary
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I tug out two wipes and inhale the sharp bleach and lemon scent.

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Sarah Vance-Tompkins
Young Adult Magical Realism
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Not every fairy's tale begins with once upon a time.

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Gabby Gilliam
Young Adult Other
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My name is a bit of a joke, a cruel trick of nature to punish my parents.

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VV Sinnott
Young Adult Magical Realism
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My parents were whispering in the living room, a sure sign they were talking about something they didn’t want me to hear.

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Dill Werner
Young Adult SciFi
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I was born to a woman who never loved me.

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Michele Blood
Young Adult Contemporary
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A bead of sweat nestled itself beneath the bandages pinching Alex's skin.

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Anikó Rajci
Young Adult Fantasy
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The thick string of dark red fury slips out of my fingertips in quick waves.

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Olivia Hinebaugh
Young Adult Magical Realism
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There wasn’t a funeral.

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Angela Dahle
Middle Grade Fantasy
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There aren't any unlucky numbers, only unlucky people.

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Mare Hagarty
Young Adult Paranormal
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The first time I saw her, she was a pink and black blur, all sharp edges and hollows.

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Heather Lea
Young Adult Dystopian
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Though humanity watches with apprehension and bated breath, I find myself drawn to this mysterious matter blanketing our world in gray.

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Laurine Bruder
Young Adult Fantasy
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Ivy Greenhill's mind ticked as the prison wagon trundled along the dirt road.

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Gillian Libby
Young Adult Romance
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I didn’t know it was possible to screw over your entire family after you’ve been dead for two hundred years, but it turns out you’re never too dead to ruin a legacy.

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Dana Nuenighoff
Young Adult Fantasy
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Purple mountains jutted into the sky before me as I choked back tears and instead a smile spread across my ocean-weathered face: the Pass.

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Patricia Nesbitt
Middle Grade Historical
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Last year, when I was nine, things were a good sight better.

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Tiffany Dawn Munn
Young Adult Fantasy
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Alorna Mirone studied her tiara, her nose crinkled in an expression of distaste.

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Joan Albright
Young Adult Steampunk
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Silas clung to his tiny chainskiff, arms wrapped around the rail while it rocked and pitched and finally settled against the chain that held it in the sky.

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PJN
Young Adult Fantasy
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Four years ago no one knew my name.

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Carol Baldwin
Young Adult Historical
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Dead bodies don't bother me none.

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Mae Parker
Young Adult Fantasy
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Henbane Tower pierced the night like a dagger thrust into the heart of my kingdom.

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Holly Pettit
Young Adult Historical
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In the dark part of the city – the Soviet sector – a garden party was just breaking up.

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Cindy Williams Schrauben
Young Adult Paranormal
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It's a challenge to breath in a vacuum.

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Cass Newbould
Young Adult Fantasy
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Heat, intense but not unpleasant, hits my face as flames flicker along the wooden floor of my bedroom.

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Lana Pattinson
Young Adult Historical
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Ominous clouds hovered over the loch, and Rowan Sinclair was about to lose his chance at freedom.

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KPKnupp
Young Adult Suspense
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For the first time since the accident, she felt comfortable in her own skin.

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TL Sumner
Young Adult Contemporary
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I could do anything for fifteen seconds.

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Gabi Snyder
Middle Grade Contemporary
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After the funeral, I fall asleep and dream of snow.

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Leslie Hauser
Young Adult Contemporary
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They say music is the key to the soul or maybe it’s the heart.

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Jennifer Pickrell
Young Adult Contemporary
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I couldn’t stop staring at Chase Lewis.

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Holly M. Campbell
Young Adult Paranormal
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The man standing in the kitchen had not been dead long.

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ML VIllax
New Adult Fantasy
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I hated Mother’s day, always had, always would.

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Jodi Cardillo
Young Adult Contemporary
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I hate it when bad music gets stuck in my head.

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Marcy S. Hatch
Young Adult SciFi
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I paddle out, breathing evenly in the early dawn, mist rising from the water.

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Hess Oster
Middle Grade Other
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Once there was a man who loved children.

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Marva Dasef
Middle Grade Fantasy
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A dark figure dropped silently from the window ledge to the alley below.

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Cassidy Taylor
Young Adult Fantasy
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Sounds of revelry drift up to Ruby's sitting room, but she wants no part of it.

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Jenny
Middle Grade Fantasy
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Deep in the forest, where the trees grew crooked and the wind whispered tales of woe, there was a tower, and in the tower there lived a girl.

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Mary Bartek
Middle Grade Contemporary
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Applause for the previous speaker was still dying down when the headmaster returned to the podium on the auditorium stage.

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Lizz Huerta
Young Adult Fantasy
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The stink of the Fire Warrior reached Indir before he spoke.

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Amanda Perry
Young Adult Fantasy
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The ship screams in protest as it skips over treacherous waves.

18 comments:

  1. Good luck, everyone! This line is gorgeous: "Dad says the empty spaces in our lives, like moments of silence in music, amplify or accentuate the importance of the people we hold closest."

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    1. Thank you!

      I hope I get to read your second line. ;-)

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  2. I like entry #5, but suggest cutting your last 3 words.

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  3. I like three entries. 7, 21, and 23

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  4. A lot of great opening sentences that make me want to keep reading. I'm glad I'm not judging. Good luck everyone!

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  5. SO many great ones! Eep! Great job everyone! I think 4, 7, 23, and 29 were my favorites :)

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  6. My faves: 19, 20, 23, 25, 40, and of course, my own...(woohoo! I made it!!!)

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  7. There are too many good ones to count here. Thanks Rebekah Purdy for picking mine. and Yeah to mshatch...we made the cut@

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  8. Good luck everyone, and thank you for sharing!

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  9. #10 and #23 make me want to read more!

    P.S. #32, add an "e" to "breath"! :)

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  10. I'm #18, and I'm realizing short choppy sentences don't lend themselves to this contest. Do we think that's contest-specific, or is it better to start off with a complex thought? And thanks for hosting this! It's got me thinking a lot more about this!

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    1. Olivia, your opening sentence is one of my faves. Don't change it. :)

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  11. Mine is short and choppy too, Olivia. I think it's important to use what works best to set the right tone for your story. While it might not give an advantage in this contest, it can still be a powerful opening in the actual manuscript. :) Good luck!

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  12. Lots of fun first lines here! I love these the most: #18, #34, #36, #43, #47, #46.

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