Tuesday, May 21, 2013

5 May Pitch+250 Finalist - Earth to Earth

Name: Amanda Leigh
Title: Earth to Earth
Genre: New Adult Fantasy

Pitch:

Twenty-three year old Hailey moves to a new city to start over after a devastating tragedy. Things get complicated when she sees her boyfriend walking down the sidewalk at her new place, looking just like he did five years ago on the day he died. Her quest for the truth lands them in a dangerous game of cat and mouse that could kill them both...for good.


First 250:

The moment glass shatters is actually quite beautiful. The way the center splinters and spiders out before bursting into nothing. Not many people really get the chance to appreciate the magnificence because everything happens instantly. So quick that you blink and it’s already done. But when you’re convinced you’re about to die, the world tends to move in slow motion.

I don’t see whatever makes him jerk the wheel violently to the left. The smell of burnt rubber assaults my nose as my body slams hard against the restraint of the seat belt. The car spins and rockets towards the guardrail. As we plow through the hunk of metal, the car tilts as gravity jerks me to the earth.

I gaze over to the driver’s side, expecting to hear my boyfriend scream. A cry. Something. There is nothing but silence as he stares back at me, sporting a perfectly calm expression. No panic, no fear.

My head snaps forward as we hit the ground and roll. Once. Twice. The third time the glass of the windshield shatters, starting as the tiniest crack before imploding into a thousand tiny particles.

I hold my arms up to shield myself a moment before the impact knocks the wind out of me, leaving me gasping for air. I’m slipping away, surrendering to the darkness.

Dying. My body goes limp, numb to shield itself from the agony. A strange haze clouds my eyesight, but I’m convinced a dark shadow swoops down in front of me.

5 comments:

  1. This entry is STELLAR. Pulled me right in from the first sentence.

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  2. Clever idea and great writing. Made me wonder about the story GHOST, but sounds like it has a different element. Congrats on going to this round and good luck with this story.

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  3. Wow! I love this concept, and the opening page is chilling. :) Best of luck to you!

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  4. I can visualize all of this as it's happening. Nice work!

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  5. Thank you all for your comments! I appreciate you taking the time to read my work and for your feedback.

    Amanda Leigh

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