Tuesday, February 21, 2012

2 Blind Date: Those All Important First Five Pages

Our February First Five Pages workshop participants have been busy with their revisions, and we're ready to present their second revision results. Please pitch in! Let them know what's working and what isn't.

As you read them, and as you write and read your own work, consider everything those pages must accomplish. The list is pretty daunting.

  • Is there a clear and unique story world and setting?
  • What do you see about the characters?
  • Are they new characters? Or have we seen characters too similar to this in other books?
  • Are the voices of the characters distinct?
  • Is the author's voice/writing competent? Compelling? Unique?
  • What kind of expectations are we setting up about where the story is going based on these pages?
  • What kind of a story is it going to be?
  • Is there enough detail? Too much?
  • How's the balance of narrative, action, and dialogue?
  • Is there so much action/tension in the opening that we can't possibly sustain it through the rest of the book without exhausting the reader?
  • Have we put in enough to make the reader root for the main character?
  • Is the reader feeling with the main character?
  • What is the tone? Theme? Opening image? How do these relate to the rest of the book?
  • Would you keep reading? Would ordinary readers keep reading?
  • Would ordinary readers off the street buy THIS book?
  • What is in these first five pages that will SELL this book?
The first five pages of a novel is our covenant with our readers. It's where we set up our promise of what is to come. Yes, we absolutely have to take readers somewhere unexpected in the rest of the novel--we have to offer up surprises, twists, and revelations. We are taking readers on a journey, and they want to be sure it isn't one they have traveled before, but at the same time, they want to know what kind of a journey it is going to be.

Think of the first five pages as the set up for a first date. The pitch or cover blurb may be what your friend tells you when she tries to set you up, but how the guy looks and greets you when you first open the door is going to determine the tone of the whole date. If you're wearing a little black dress and your favorite Manolo's for a nice dinner out, and he shows up in camo pants and a tank top to take you bungee jumping, your reaction to the switch is going to become a really important factor in the success of the date. And guess what? There aren't all that many people who would handle that switch well enough that there would be a second date.

We can write the best book on the planet, but if it doesn't set up the RIGHT expectations for the reader, we are setting ourselves up to fail with many potential readers.

For me, I think, this is one of the hardest lessons. We know what comes next in our books. We love our characters and our plots, and we have reasons why we do things. We can always explain.

But here's the thing. However far we think we have taken the characters away from the ordinary, however emotional or tense or action packed we have made our opening, however much we have put into our first five pages, if we don't set up the right expectations and lead inevitably into the next five pages and into the rest of the book, at some point we are going to get in trouble. If the reader gets to page five and doesn't understand something that is going to be revealed on page six--and doesn't CARE enough to go on to page six, then we haven't done our jobs.

It doesn't stop there, of course. The first five pages lead to the next five, and the first ten lead to the first twenty-five, and the first twenty-five lead to the first fifty. It's no surprise, really, that these are usually the increments in which agents make requests, and it's amazing what a great agent or editor can spot that we writers miss. (Seriously!)

Our responsibility to satisfy our readers never stops. But it all starts with the first five pages.

So. What do you think? If you read the five entries below, have they rocked the first five? What else can they change?

Thanks so much for your comments on the entries!

Happy reading,

Martina

2 comments:

  1. Great post. I'd like to add that all important first line. There are many books I put down because I don't love that first line.

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  2. I need that daunting list tattooed to the inside of my left arm.

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