First Five Pages Workshop - First April Revisions Are Up

Good morning everyone! The first April revisions are posted below. You know the drill. All workshop participants must comment on each of the other entries. But we invite and encourage everyone to participate.

The basic rules are always the same:

• Be kind and courteous, but truthful.
• Do not line edit. Look underneath the words to what's going on in the story.
• Do consider tone, voice, and style and how appropriate they are to the story being told.
• Do think about what the words tell us about the characters, the narrator, and the world created.
• Consider if this is the best place to start the story.

Our goal is to help each other grow, so really think hard about each entry!

Happy editing,

Martina & Lisa